Thread title explains it all (Yes, I fucked up "critique".). Post shit you've written in spoiler tags. Try to keep it to a reasonable length. By posting here you're opening yourself up to critique. Before you critique someone else, you have to post some of your own shit in the thread. That's the system. ------------------ Writing Sample: Spoiler On my walk home from work I saw a group of Feminists protesting at a park. I'm not trying to pick on Feminists. I have nothing against them. But they were protesting there and I stopped to listen to their message. I kind of felt like it was my fault they were out there, being a man and all, so why not hear them out? It's only fair. I tried to listen to what they were saying but it didn't make sense to me. I'm not very smart, being a man and all, but I knew they were angry or passionate or just there for solidarity. Those seemed like good reasons for protesting. I'd like to make the story more interesting by saying one of them confronted me. But that didn't happen. I just listened for as long as I could before my mind started wandering to a couple of weeks back when a telemarketer called me after dinner. It's not a fair comparison but, being a man and all, it's what I thought of. I'm just being honest. So the telemarketer had the answer to a problem I didn't know I had and these Feminists had the answer to a problem I didn't I had either. That's all. I'm not saying the Feminists wanted money from me, I'm not even sure if they'd take it. They never asked for money, at least. Anyway, there's this saying in the Tao de Ching, "Those who know do not speak. Those who speak do not know." It's one of those eastern wisdom pretzels that look like it says nothing, tries to say everything, and end's up saying something despite itself. But I'm not a monk living in a forest. I'm just a working guy standing in a park with a crowd of women. So I walked up to one of the leaders of the protest. An older women with regal grey hair, and big hollywood sunglasses, the kind that used to be in fashion a couple decades ago. I walked up to her and I asked if I could giver her a hug.