Daidraco
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Honestly much better than any of the DF Warbringer shorts. Xal'atath looks good, and the tone feels more on point. Now to wait for them to fuck it up.
I guess at this point, the audience has to encourage even the most basic of stories in hopes that they'll get better. Because even talking shit about them doesnt seem to have any positive effect.
This is "ok" but to the audience thats just mildly interested in the lore. You can figure out what the main points of the short are about and who is who by just having a basic understanding of the lore. "Ok, queen bitch Nerubian and her Princess daughter told the Black Empire to get fucked. This made them prosperous.. somehow? Maybe because they were no longer in conscription or slavery to them - Ie. Transylvania and the Persians? Just a single "drawing" of them being handed off to the Black Empire could have explained that, or I could just be completely wrong.
Then, Xal'Atath herself. Why the fuck is she coming out of the wall like this is a game of Portal? What exactly is the queen carrying on her body that has her cursed with the image of Xal'Atath? Wait.. now her daughter can see her too? Is she corporeal form? Or is she a fucking ghost?
Then, as the daughter kills the Queen - they add too much to decipher from the scene by just using script. If we're believing that the empire was prosperous under her rule because she pulled out of the black empire (if thats right?) - then we have to know WHY the princess, which was alive at that point and saw it for herself the difference - Why SHE thinks that the Nerubians rushing back off into war would make her people live the good life, again? Who or what is kicking the Nerubians while they are down and why does she want to go to war with them? Is she going to war against the black empire? I mean, give us a fucking clue?
------------------------ Lets excuse all that shit for a second, though.
There was almost ZERO political intrigue given into why the daughter stabbed her. The motive was vaguely clear. But did she just wake up one day and go, you know what bitch? DIE. Just what the fuck? Some ghost bitch shows up and you're instantly ready to fucking gut your mother? Stupid. Give the audience at least some kind of reason the build up happened. The daughter being completely out of focus until that pivotal moment is just poorly thought out for the motive that should have been built.
Then, as they go to war - not one bit of "DOOM and GLOOM on the horizon" was ever portrayed, or at least portrayed properly. Not every video needs to have a mountain of testosterone pouring out of it, but the end scene with the army lined up? That should have displayed an existential dread - an almost horrific picturesque view of an Army frothing at the mouth to go back to war. Why? Because the Princess comes off as her and her people have been WRONGED and HELD BACK all this time and now its THEIR TIME.
-- Its like the writers all collectively write this shit. Then when they are finished, they all read through it themselves to make sure it makes sense to "them" and give it a pass. When they really need to fucking run it past someone OUTSIDE of the fucking writing team.
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